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First reaction: Huh? Second reaction: *rereads* Third reaction: Ha! Fourth reaction: *Laughs uncontrollably... pauses... laughs uncontrollably again* :smt041

Wow, thats really pretty. I don't have any suggestions because I couldn't find anything wrong. Most poems people write for other people are usually boring and cliche ( You mean ...

Hi! Now, on to the critique! First off, please capitalize all your 'i's! I am still your little girl , but i am growing older . i am still your ...

I like the sort of dazed and confused feeling I get from this poem. The only thing that bothered me slightly was the rhyming. I would suggest adding a line ...

How do I attach it to my post? :shock:

/Users/sonja/Desktop/Photo 54.jpg Me. Not sure if this will work, but if it does I'll post the rest later... It didn't... mmmm... try this... [url]/Users/sonja/Desktop/Photo 40.jpg[/url] Ok. I give up

Hi! Looking forward to reading your work! Nice to meet you!

The writing was good but..... (BigBadBear and Sleeping Valor both mentioned something to this effect already)..... Definitely too Twilightish.

I think we all got lucky. This is a great site to improve your writing, as well as make lots of friends. I too know what you mean about friends ...

Hi, and welcome! I'll be seventeen in um... lets see here... three and a half years . :D Time goes by so fast.... Sometimes I wish I were Peter pan... ...

Hi! Welcome! HI! Welcome! Hi! Um.... um... yeah. Nice to meet you! :D

Hi! I'm Sonja, nice to meet you. I hope you like it here too, this is a great place to get good advice and improve your writing. Everyone here is ...

I really liked the first paragraph; you had a nice mood going that was interesting and kept me reading. But after I finished I thought to myself: "Wait... what is ...

First off, I don't see how this poem was cliche at all. You did a beautiful job of painting images and setting a sort of magical dream-like feel for it. ...

Fortunately, the force from the crash blew them so far they landed right in the cemetery, making a hole so deep they didn't even have to did a grave.